Category: Writers Block
Does anyone out there enjoy a bit of poetry with a strange undertone or a bit of a freeky one? This is one of mine called the darkest hour that I wrote when in a very bad frame of mind. Some of my poetry has existed on the grapheeti board for a while so I decided to expand. If you like it, I have more, though possibly not this strange?
The darkest hour:
What exists within me,
cannot be vocalised.
Take a trip into my soul,
you may find yourself surprised.
Understand that I must survive,
I must live at any price.
If need be that I hurt someone once,
I will do it gladly, twice.
As I struggle day upon day to bring,
my character to the light.
the deepest parts of me remain,
in the black silence of night.
Where no one can ever go,
facts noone would think of me.
my character phomes and breaks,
like the rath of a stormy sea.
when I've found your weekeness,
and when I've seen you fall.
during your darkest hour,
only then will I come to call.
so never presume to judge,
never say you comprehend.
for no one can ever understand,
not even ones closest friend.
it is very dark but the grammar is lacking somewhat, all the poem needs is a some close re-reading, and some ruthlessly honest re writing, and you'll be there...
yeah I know. I don't write it to write it, if you know what I mean. I write it because it's what I feel sometimes. I don't proof it, it's just there.
that's a good way to ease the pain and if your not thinking of publication ect, and it's purely as an outlet,you have the freedom to develop a distinctive style without the pressure of pleasing the public....you cant really lose...
Well it's silly to look at the grammar in a poem!! The contense counts and it is dark but really good.
Congrats on yor 100th post Fabbaless